Sunday, July 2, 2017

Butterfly Dream: Motorbike Rider Haiku by David McMurray

English Original

motorbike rider
po-potato-potato
kick-starts summer

David McMurray


Chinese Translation (Traditional)

摩托車騎士
撲通撲通撲通聲
啟動夏天之旅

Chinese Translation (Simplified)

摩托車騎士
撲通撲通撲通聲
啟動夏天之旅


Bio Sketch

David McMurray enjoys the beat of Sum 41, a group that started out in Ajax, Ontario, as a punk rock band a generation ago. Their old album All Killer No Filler" is still popular in Japan. SUM 41 from Ajax made this a summer in Tokyo to remember for David.  http://www.asahi.com/ajw/

28 comments:

  1. David skillfully uses a self-coined term, "po-potato-potato," to create an onomatopoeic effect that greatly enhances the audio-emotional aspect of the poem.

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    1. I saw a potato moon In Taipei last week.

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  2. The poem is exciting to me. I can imagine the scene clearly by using the effect like " po-potato-potato". Haiku has a lot of tasetes.

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  3. I have never used onomatopoeias in haiku,so I would like to use in next time.English haiku is funny.

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    1. Can I find an onomatopoeic effect in Masaoka Shiki's Haiku?

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  4. It was a haiku that makes me feel happy

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  5. This haiku has good rhythm.
    ”po-potato-potato,potato,potato...”
    When I hear this haiku, I want to eat a potato.

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  6. We 15th graduate wants to take your lecture every day.Thank you for your continuous support.

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  7. This haiku is "po-potato-potato" of interesting expression.
    From now on great haiku please make.

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  8. "po-potato-potato" is very interesting rhythm!
    I will use onomatopoeia like this in next my Haiku.

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  9. A scene that runs exhilaratingly with a motorcycle under the summer blue sky has come up.

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  10. That's a fascinating haiku.
    I drive a car, not a motorcycle, please.
    I'd like to eat potato and begin summer, too.

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  11. Very good haiku.
    When summer comes, I feel like eating potato, too.
    I don't have a motorcycle, so I'd like to run and go to buy it.

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  12. I thought that it was very interesting.
    Happy summer seems to begin.
    So that it is wonderful summer! ☺︎

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  13. It's a splendid haiku!
    I will enjoy it much in the summer vacation when the potato of the sound of the motorcycle is interesting😊💛♫

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  14. This haiku makes me feel the summer. 🌴🌺
    I have never taken a motorcycle. 🛵💨
    If I can ride a motorcycle, I want to drive near
    the sea. 🌴⛱🐠💕
    I want to eat a stomach full of potatoes. 🍟♡

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  15. I thought that it was very interesting expression.
    I heard a fun sound of summer.
    Moreover the momentum of the summer can also be felt.

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  16. a haiku japanese tresure.Mack has a heart japanese.

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  17. I thought this haiku is interesting and easy to remember.
    The effect of rhythm is fantastic!!!

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  18. I thought this haiku is very exciting!
    A novice is important in the summer so that engine does not start when the motorbike does not start by a kick.

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  19. Your haiku is wonderful.
    An eye could be closed and imagined!
    I think I look like you and should be able to compose a haiku, too.

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  20. Your haiku is wonderful.
    An eye could be closed and imagined!
    I think I look like you and should be able to compose a haiku, too.

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  21. Yor haiku is very great.When I see this haiku, I feel a nostalgia uniquely.I also want to ride a bike and go to the sea.

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  22. po-potato-potatoという音の響きが英語の俳句にはとても新鮮だと思います。
    日本語で俳句を作るのは好きなのですが、英語の俳句は苦手だなと思っていました。
    私もこんな俳句が作れるようになりたいです。

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  23. single flower
    mark the end of
    summer sky

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    1. Your haiku is interesting! This kind of representation is good to get used to as I can too!

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  24. Your poem has a sense of rhythm and it is very interesting

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